Reviewed by: Ruiqi
THIS IS SERIOUSLY COOL! I love this story! You wrote two chapters that were actually GOOD! I dunno her name though. The girl. But I think she will be able to make her dad notice someday. Unfortunately, why doesn't David put her to sleep when shes angry with him? Hes just going to get set on fire...
Reviewed by: Dave
I read "Modern Godess" Pt. 1 and 2. Again, it was more a recounting of a story, or a summation when the events would have been interesting as a conventional story. At first it felt a little like a mix between Unbreakable and Groundhog Day.
I thought there was some wry, amusing satire on Christianity, but the storyteller's voice didn't strike a chord with me (I also find the contractions with ' irritating, even if it is correct). The Christian aspect and the divine fantasy elements reminded me a little of Hellblazer, but John Constantine is a much more compelling anti-hero, probably because he's a thousand times more subtle. I think the protagonist is a little beyond sympathy because she can't die, can't even be hurt, is utterly narcissistic, and reveals no glimmer of humanity. If a story is going to be bent, I like to have at least a glimpse of something making the whole hellish experience worth it.
If she was a sardonic, impish miscreant full of misdirection and glamor, that would've been nice. I think you give away too much with the inner voice, when an almost understated conventional story with mostly dialog and no inner thoughts would add some mystery and interest.
It's definitely a big departure from your normal writing, which I have to say I prefer.
Reviewed by: Mikey
This girl is something else with the whole gift of fire and how she chooses to use it, more descriptive you can feel the anger in her internal dialog and can tell she didn't take all that well to David I like this one a tad better and will go with a solid four star review.
Reviewed by: Dan M.
Here\'s my opinion...
Ok well again this was interesting to me, there were some cool parts like her setting David\'s hair on fire. And I like the idea of being able to just be invincible basically , I think just about eveyone at one point in their life toys around with this idea.
The ending I felt left I was left hanging for a third part where all of this would come together and make sense. But at the same time I think she finally realizes, Ok now maybe if I want to know what the hell was going on it was time to stop screwing around and listen and possibly paray to \
Reviewed by: The Author Herself
"Modern Goddess 2" is also very vulgar but this one is funnier than the first in many respects. It also is less confusing and a little more like science fiction. It could be inspirational if it wasn't so freaking depressing and weird. This girl was apparently given protection and power by God, and all she's interested in is goofing off. It kind of makes it seem like if there was another sequel she'd get punished. All in all, it's somewhat entertaining but so goofy that I can't take it seriously at all, it's more invented for a cheap laugh than to make a point.
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