Reviewed by: Michael Knutzen
My father served in Desert Storm. It was after the divorce but I recall that sensation. Not sure what each day would bring but hoping to be prepared for "the worst". It's an odd sensation to read it from someone else and still have it ring so true. Not that a writer can't do this but Wow this one was almost erie
Reviewed by: Mikey
This was a different piece from what I expected to read their is much I would like to say but have not the words. I think you gave a wonderful representation of the thoughts and fears That do wander into the mind and bring much to the service to question in the ability of ourselves and what the world offers in the redemption of the answers in hopes fears and confusion. I would rate this with a 3 star review.
Reviewed by: Dan M.
Here's my opinion...
I thought the good points about this piece were of course the relevance to what is going on right now, and I also have friends and family over in Iraq fighting that I worry about.
So because of this I can relate with the character and what is going through his mind.
I actually lost a step-dad that was close to me and the only decent father I ever had growing up , and it took me until the day of the funeral for it to hit me and cry.
So the part about waiting for that call, and wondering if he is going to cry or what made a lot of sense to me because until it happens you just don't know how you are going to feel.
So I thought it was a good piece, my only criticism is that I found it to be a little dry, I had to take a break from it for some reason and I had troubles with it holding my attention.
If there were a way to condense it and make it more powerful and potent, which is very hard to do anyway, then I could see it being a more touching piece. 3 and a half stars.
Reviewed by: The Author Herself
"No Longer Junior" explores serious issues but because it is founded entirely on speculation I don't think I did a very good job. I've never known what it's like to have a dad away at war or to be an oldest son who thinks he will be expected to take care of his family. I do not totally understand the "alpha male" attitude I was trying to represent. I think I did a decent job showing Thomas's internal struggle between love and loyalty to his father and wanting to "be a man." He is uncertain of how he would really act if his father died, but knows how he would want to act, how he would want to be viewed. I rated this so low because I think it is a bit of a cliché, and isn't very convincing.
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