Moonlight
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Review #3: Reviewed by: Mikey Rating:  Comments: And I quote the words. I gave her what I thought of a decent burial.Then I sat and waited to die, too. But all that happened was that I got cold and hungry, and so to stop my constant misery,I had gone to the pond and jumped in, not knowing how to swim, and sank to the bottom. I tried to let my breath go and allow my life to dissolve into the cold waters, to let the darkness swallow me. Instead, the waters embraced me on all sides and offered serenity and peace instead of oblivion. Wow incredible!!!!! This one awesome as well. I smile as I remember the circumstances under which I encountered the flower. I remember my dismay when I found out that, in order to keep it forever, the flowers beauty was sacrificed. I loved the flowers and delighted in being surrounded by them, but I decided I would much rather leave them where they naturally grew so they could stay beautiful for their natural lifetimes instead of turning them into ugly zombies of the garden whose lives are stagnant forever. you truly have a beautiful elegance in your words a very rich tapestry of description , and I will have you know that you have done it again. I will never look or use the word music box the same way. This was a great piece so full and rich in details their are so many fine quotes I would like to give on this work but just know that this is a great story a small master piece if you will, as for my grade a high 4 stars almost a perfect 5 again a great story.
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Review #2: Reviewed by: Dan M. Rating: Comments: Here's my opinion... How you describe everything in this story really lets me see, feel, and almost hear what its like to be in this cave, and what the outside world feels to this character. The story itself was a bit slow in the begining, but then picked up and gained my interest in the character after about the first third of the story. I did feel one overwhelming similarity about this character to another character in the book "The Hobbit" named "Gollum". I was expecting at any moment for the character to pick up some item and start calling it, its preciousssssssssss! lol But then when the character "Me" ventured out to the open cavern with the moonlight pouring in and started to reflect upon the time when "she" had ventured out of the cave and had met the family and had the experiences of the outside world, was then that I started to realize that this was a beautiful young girl, probably in her late teens. Then as I read more toward the middle and the end, you get a real feel of how awkward the outside world was the her, and why she would want to go back to the cave and live there forever. I thought this was a sad story and that it pointed out very well how some people just cant seem to understand other people who have grown up differently then themselves.
This story was of course very well written and for the most part I enjoyed it although it was kind of a "feel bad" type of story, sort of depressing.
I just couldnt help but feel a deep sorrow for the main character, and like the family in the story, wish I could help her somehow.
So overall I thought the idea of this story was conveyed very well, and was fairly interesting. Three and a half stars!
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Review #1: Reviewed by: The Author Herself Rating: Comments: This could have been four stars if it wasn't sort of sappy-strange at times. Of course, my idea for this, and its first draft, were born when I was in high school, and my writing style's matured since then. I think it can be a little confusing as to how the character ended up living underground in the first place, and how she ended up alone. I leave this up to speculation, but I think most people can't speculate enough based on what I gave them. I think that the points and observations the character makes in this story are kind of refreshing, and even though the present tense voice (switching to past) and the format of the story are unusual, it can still be enjoyed, and some may really like it.
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