Technical Aspects
Story length: 1,294 words/5 pages double spaced
Voice: First person, present tense
Genre:Young-Adult Fantasy
Copyrighted: 1997
Story information
Main character: Iris's mother, whose name isn't mentioned
Character description: Mother of six children and member of a nature-based somewhat tribal community.
Supporting characters: Iris: The focus of the story; it is about her coming-of-age ritual.
Laurel: Iris's new lover
Setting:Indeterminate time, seemingly primitive; probably in another dimension or another planet
General Plot
Iris's mother is preparing her daughter Iris for the ritual to make her a woman. She reflects on Iris's childhood and wonders at the new beauty in her almost-adult daughter. When the ritual begins, Iris performs her duties and her mother watches proudly. Finally Iris goes to the river to select a mate and ends up coming out of the water with another woman, who has to select for her a new name for adulthood. The mother explores her feelings on this unusual choice.
Information, inspiration, and other notes
This is very heavily influenced by Joan D. Vinge's short story "Mother and Child"; though the plot is not at all the same, the general mood and inspiration came from that story. This began as a poem and evolved into this.

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