Reviewed by: Becca
I ACTUALLY THOUGHT THIS WAS AMAZING. I LOVED IT. I TOTALY AGREE - THE EMOTION WAS IN THERE AND I UNDERSTOOD AS I READ IT - THE ENDING WAS SHOCKING BUT I AGREE. GREAT READ!
Reviewed by: Mikey
I was really able to get into this fine work of art that you have created so deep so felt, filled with such emotion, especially for those of us who have evolved into a new understanding, those of us who will not feel like conformity should be the option or opinion that is not our own I love this in every sense of the word and felt at times that this is how I would say it, I could find no better words or emotion to fill the thoughts of evolution to think outside the box and from the hive. I would give this wonderful piece a perfect 5 star review. Excellent!!!!!!!
Reviewed by: Dan M.
Here's my opinion...
I really loved that twist at the end, it makes you want to re-read it to re-absorb what it is that she is so upset about again.
I thought it was well written, kept my attention and did help you to feel the pain that she was feeling while writing this.
Again the ending was a definite unexpected twist that was great.
I just wanted to say One thing about review #3 by Fred, I think he has over-anylized this a bit, and his review seems to be about as long as the story itself lol. He must have really been moved by this piece, because I can't think of anything more to say about it lol.
Great short with a great twist. Four Stars "****"
Reviewed by: Fred
Yes, "seriously, this is one of the BEST things I've EVER READ!"
Well, let's start with the technicals. Hard-hitting, grabs your attention right away. The story is structured as a letter, so its like we as readers are given that naughty yet pleasurable feeling of reading someone else's mail. What's more, its a breakup letter, filled with juicy, juicy details. And man, that ending... a really sudden twist that makes you really THINK... textbook short story writing! 5 stars for the technical skill alone.
As for the content, holistically, the story makes you think. While I was reading the thing, I kept on thinking that a)the person the narrator was breaking up with sure sounded like a creep, but b)we are only getting one side of the story, so it may just be sour grapes. If this were all there was to it, however, it would not be as satisfying. The ending of the story made me realize however, WHY it is so one sided... It really made me think about who it is we "worship," what expectations we have of them, what it must mean to love them. It made me realize that there is a lot wrong in our process of worship/love/communication, and that there must be an improvement in the process.
In relationships such as the one in the story, we should expect more. But whose responsibility is it to deliver more? In the story, is it the narrator's? The letter recipient's? Or is it the society and institutions that make up the "rules" of the narrator's and recipient's relationship? I believe it is the society's responsibility. As a society, we all have to reevaluate the "rules," and be more open and open-minded, more supportive, and more perceptive toward the way these relationships work. As a society we have to help each other find the truth, realizing that each individual one of us will have a different truth, but that truth will set us free individually. And the irony is, when more of us are individually set free, society is set free as well.
All in all, a very thought provoking story.
Reviewed by: Bunky
Here's my opinion... Nice little twist at the end. I mean, as a breakup letter, it's good. Very mature, no cheap shots.. then you see the addressee and it's like, wow. Clever, I liked it.
Reviewed by: The Author Herself
I enjoy this story, if it can be called "story." I like it because most of it is so typical of normal relationships, even though the one described here is obviously not your usual relationship. It is just slightly cliché, I for some reason think that, but I've never read anything quite like it and think it's kind of unique. I'm surprised that more people who have read the "breakup letter" haven't picked up on who it's really about before the last two lines; I think I left lots of clues, more than I meant to. I hope I've successfully deluded the reader. :)
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